To: John From: Harold Sniveling, Acquisitions Editor Re: Your submission
Our editorial team has had the opportunity to work through your manuscript. Your “Gospel” does not fit our publishing needs at this time. While undeniably sincere, the work is marred by undeveloped characters, uneven plot, choppy style and numerous digressions. To be more specific, I include below our reader’s report.
Chapter 1: A nice opening—vaguely uplifting without being preachy. But then you abruptly sail into “a man sent from God named John.” I couldn’t figure out how this “Baptist” contributes to the story. Indeed, except for a couple of unexpected appearances in the rest of the manuscript, you seem to forget him. Your introduction of the central character is disappointingly underdeveloped: what of his youth and his early influences? Did he suffer some early trauma that explains his bizarre self-image? What of his inner aspirations? Relationships with women?